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You Can't Fix by ~ksmsoccer89:iconksmsoccer89:

Categories Literature > Prose > Fiction > Romantic > Teen


Your hands press against mine like thorns of a rose (they used to fit perfectly into mine like two corresponding pieces to a puzzle) and your words pierce right through me like a shard of glass, stiffening up my lungs and stealing the breath right out of me.

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Your tears fall like the first snow of winter, making me freeze in place; unable to do anything but sit by idly and watch you break into a million pieces (the beauty of winter's first snow) happen right before my guilt-ridden eyes.

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Sometimes I'll stare into your eyes and watch them fill up with hurt, just so I will have someone to relate with. (You broke my heart just as much I ended up breaking yours) You're the one who taught me I could never be perfect, no matter how hard I tried. You showed me just how imperfect and unwanted I really am.

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Thanks for taking what little sliver of happiness I had and locking it away in a place I can never reach again. (Your heart is forever out of my grasp now. Once broken, never to be whole again)
©2009 ~ksmsoccer89
:iconksmsoccer89:

Author's Comments

Full title: You Can't Fix What's Meant to be Broken

here ya go. take it or leave it. a little something i wrote before bed tonight. you can tell what my current mood is. i started on a couple more story ideas as well. very weird ones lol. miss you all and i hope you will give this one a chance and a read. thanks :hug:

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~morgana-the-darkling Nov 5, 2009, 5:53:22 AM
I actually really like this. :)

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Claim me,
Mind and Soul.
:iconcontagiouspixie:
~ContagiousPixie Nov 5, 2009, 6:08:15 AM
I really like your sad ones...
but maybe for me you could try writing a more happy, hopeful one?

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"Alone in a world where cruelty has no standards, makes you think dying is the only way to survive"- Chelsea King
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~Konnichi Nov 5, 2009, 3:15:12 PM
Oh, I like this one. I can feel everything you've written...

--
If practice makes perfect, and no one is perfect, why practice?
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~saykha Nov 6, 2009, 2:01:15 AM
Wow :hug: I wish I could express myself like this. You have a talent of placing emotion into words - wonderfully written.

I hope this is just an illustration of how someone in this situation would feel and that you didn't actually feel like this? If you did I hope you're ok?

--
I am what I am, until I am no more...
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~black-panacea Nov 6, 2009, 1:14:50 PM
wow... listening to THIS IS WAR by 30 Seconds To Mars and reading this... tears in my eyes...

but it's beautiful...

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"Mary was a different girl, had a thing for astronauts"


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~ksmsoccer89 Nov 7, 2009, 4:48:13 PM
i dont think i have that song. must go get it.

and thanks so much. your comments are always so wonderful. youre awesome :)

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I am a lost soul desperately trying to find his way in this world of twists and turns.

Have faith. Keep hope. Dream big.
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~black-panacea Nov 7, 2009, 5:11:54 PM
it's totally brand new song, so... :)

thanks... I just like to read your stuff :) Check mine in free time if you want :) But I'm not native speaker, so my English suck:P

have a great Sunday :D

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"Mary was a different girl, had a thing for astronauts"


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~ksmsoccer89 Nov 8, 2009, 5:45:35 PM
well that makes sense then lol

youre very welcome. thanks again! ill definitely go check yours out right now :D
where are you from?

i hope you had a great sunday too. and im still trying to finish that poem for you :P

--
I am a lost soul desperately trying to find his way in this world of twists and turns.

Have faith. Keep hope. Dream big.
:iconblack-panacea:
~black-panacea Nov 8, 2009, 6:43:32 PM
Hi there :)
I'm from Poland, so here's almost 4am, and as you can see I'm not sleeping:P

So, I'm waiting for that poem for me, can't wait.

My Sunday was ok, but now is Monday and I'm going back to my UNIVERSITY town, so, I'll be offline :(
How about your Sunday?
:)

--
"Mary was a different girl, had a thing for astronauts"


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~Moon-and-Ash Nov 8, 2009, 11:11:41 PM
Wonderful. A change, I think, not thematically, but in the strength of self portrayed here. The heartbreak is reciprocal, and tangible, and lovingly rendered. It couldn't be heartbreak without that, I think. Love. :heart:

Especially: "Your tears fall like the first snow of winter, making me freeze in place; unable to do anything but sit by idly and watch you break into a million pieces (the beauty of winter's first snow) happen right before my guilt-ridden eyes."

Breathy, wintery sighs, all around.
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